One Sunny day there was a crocodile walking down the street and he found an orange he forgot his breakfast so he ate the soft orange for his breakfast. After he had finished he carried on and on his way he bumped in to a pizza shop so he decided to have a pizza with peppers on it when he was finished he made his way back home and on his way he saw a cafe so he went in for some diner he had fish and chips and for his drink he had water and then he had a cup of tea.
This weeks challenge was to include the following words in our 100 word challenges:
Crocodile
Soft
Orange
Pepper
Forgot
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That is one very hungry crocodile. Good use of all 5 words. Be sure to organise your statements into sentences. E.g you wrote at the start: ...and he found an orange he forgot his breakfast so he ate the soft.... This may have read better by using a full stop somewhere within the above text. Where do you think? Try it and read it to yourselves with amuse where you have put in a full stop. My class are having a good go at this too.
ReplyDeleteWell done for entering and keep it up. I look forward to reading more of your challenges throughout the year, all the best.
Mr Eitel-Smith,
Assistant Head at www.y6pewithall.primaryblogger.co.uk
Runcorn, England
Team100wc
Hello Padraig & Oliver - I enjoyed reading this - well done on getting the 5 words into your writing. Your crocodile certainly has a big appetite! Try to punctuate your sentences all the way through your writing - your last sentence is quite long. I hope you continue to take part in the 100 word challenge.
ReplyDeleteMrs Williams (Team 100WC)
http://merrydale.primaryblogger.co.uk/category/100-word-challenge/